critique - wk 7 (the lowdown)

For this week, I worked mostly on the lowdown my fusion covers. The lowdown was a challenge to design and I have a few samples of what I did from Thursday's design through what will run this Thursday. The photos below show the progression from Thursday through my final design on Tuesday. I liked designing it and I really appreciated having a guide to, well, guide me. I also enjoyed taking my own photos, since I could do whatever I wanted with them. It's funny 'cos I went from having too little text, to having a too much.
One of the things that troubles me about the pages is the fact that the first and second pages have some white space, and the text doesn't look so cramped, but the last spread looks very cramped. The text practically bump against each other.
Another thing I'm not so sure is the abundance of colors on both pages. The fourth page especially has a multitude of color and I don't know if that helps the reader in their comprehension of the different parts of the story or just confuses them.

Let me know what you think.


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